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In web of spider
Dancing for very last time
Moth dies unnoticed
Entry for :iconpenpa:´s connest [link], prompt: trapped

I´ve never wrote haiku before, so it was quite interesting:) As English isn´t my native language I used syllabes counter, so number of syllabes should be right.
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meszarosnadia Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Haha ! I had a good laugh on this one. It may be even more thoughtful: it could speak about world's injustices, like poor people, stuck in the web of money, power, politics... I don't know if it was your intention but we can see something of it in this Haiku.
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lulu-illussions Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Originally, I wrote this for the contest, theme was "trapped". I was really writing only about night butterfly, but I like how you see the haiku. It´s good if every reader can findmeaning of poetry.
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whimandwonder Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really like this haiku. I think the fact that the moth dies "unnoticed" is the saddest part. You call attention NOT to the death itself, or a painful/gory death, or anything like that, you call attention to the fact that the moth is alone and unseen. I love that - very moving.
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lulu-illussions Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I´m really glad that you liked this haiku and that you felt touched by it.
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liivfer Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
very meaningful!
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lulu-illussions Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. I very appreciate all your support:hug:
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liivfer Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
no prob
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v4vile Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
quite good :-)
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lulu-illussions Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks. I never wrote haiku before:)
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